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| My Holiday Gift to You. :) |
Greetings, my darling sixers, and welcome to the final Six Sentence Sunday of 2011! We're gonna close out with a bit from the new opening of my erotic horror story The House on Shadowbird Lane, which I hope to sub next week. Have you ever felt like you might have multiple personalities?
Evalyn hadn’t slept in
days. She couldn’t bear to imagine what horrors the other her would unleash on the world if allowed out to "play". She
paced the well worn path in her bedroom carpet, doing everything she could
think of to stay awake. But despite her best efforts, her eyes began to droop
and she yawned, fighting the urge to climb into the bed. Shaking off the
fatigue, she grabbed a bottle from her dresser and popped it open before
tossing another caffeine pill down her gullet.
She
caught a glimpse of herself in the mirror and started.For more authors who may or may not be battling evil inside themselves, be sure to check out the official Six Sentence Sunday Site here.
Multiple personalities...don't we all have those? ;)
ReplyDeleteLots of creepy goodness in these six. :) Happy holidays & best of luck with the sub! Is the campground story next on your project list?
Love the well-worn carpet detail—really shows us what a miserable, endless ritual this is for her. Great six!
ReplyDeleteGreat six!
ReplyDeleteHmm... no multiple personalities, but I've started hearing voices in my head recently.
ReplyDeleteI like the restlessness in this excerpt - is the setup that her alternate persona can only come out after she goes to sleep? Or is that what it used to be, only she sees something in the mirror that suggests it's about to happen while she's awake?
Thanks for taking part.
I missed the list deadline for this week, but I did get six sentences up! http://kelworthfiles.wordpress.com/2011/12/18/six-sentence-sunday-more-from-children/
Stay awake, stay awake, staaayyy awaaakkkke! And just what did she see? Great six as usual, Brien. :)
ReplyDeleteExcellent post & storyline! You made me feel Evalyn's desperation to fight off sleep, and of course that last line's a great hook. Wonderful premise! Although... the evil inside me doesn't get fought off nearly as hard ;) Happy Sunday, and happy holidays too, since there's no SSS next week.
ReplyDeleteSpooky, can't decide if she's talking herself into the whole situation or if the Other Her really awaits! Great excerpt!
ReplyDeleteGreat work. I hope you have a very merry Christmas. Happy writing. Ax
ReplyDeleteOh, that's really creepy. What happens when she falls asleep? Can't wait to find out.
ReplyDeleteIntriguing, nice setup of tension and mystery!
ReplyDeleteoh, what did she see?
ReplyDeleteGreat description of her emotions! Happy holidays Brien!
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